Monday, October 19, 2009

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Slow music rushing down a cold ice river when you pause it everything
On earth stops except for you as the water freezes you remember the words
Nothing can stop you from turning it back on as you know can't leave and you know you can't
Go, you cant go anywhere until the end.
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5 comments:

  1. Eric ZimmerOctober 20, 2009 at 3:29 PM

    I like when you say, Slow music rushing down a cold ice river. Nice job!

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  2. Henry NewmanOctober 20, 2009 at 3:45 PM

    I like how you did the acrostic! It was so awesome! I really liked it. Nice job

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  3. CardinaleOctober 20, 2009 at 4:40 PM

    I liked the way your poem flowed and nice job Olivia.

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  4. DavidOctober 20, 2009 at 6:33 PM

    Awesome poem! I love your way of sailing with all of those words! Great Job!

    Love,
    Maia

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  5. HaleyOctober 20, 2009 at 8:28 PM

    Dear Olivia,
    I know you might think I comented on yours because your my friend, but I didn't. I really liked this one and it is verry unique!To me, the golden line was:
    Slow music rushing down a cold ice river when you pause it everything
    Again, I loved your poem!!!
    Sincerely,
    Haley

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