Wednesday, November 19, 2008

I Don't Want you

Hey I hate you in fact go take a hike
Go to your mommy and cry like a baby
I'll pop you on the face with blood dripping down your face
I hate you and you hate me



P.S. This will never change.
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  1. MaggieNovember 19, 2008 at 4:49 PM

    There's a little bit of anger in this poem, huh? Part of me wants to say, "Daawood, that's not nice! Don't write such violent words. It's inappropriate!" But then there is this other side of me that reads this and says, "Sometimes people feel like this. This poem really captures the feeling of hate." I'm just thinking on the page, here.

    Stylistically, the p.s. is very potent. You wouldn't want to overuse it, but it really works to punctuate the depth of feeling in your poem.

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  2. WillzieJanuary 6, 2009 at 9:19 PM

    Daawood you were creeping me out a little this time.

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  3. SamuelJanuary 20, 2009 at 1:18 PM

    Who do you hate?

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  4. Daawood NanaJanuary 20, 2009 at 1:24 PM

    I don't really hate anybody that bad but I just wrote it for fun.

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